Feedback response

I completely understood and agreed with the feedback I received for my first draft. On of our biggest challenges is writing something coherent. At first it was abstract, but then that was not making any sense, so we had to make it a lot less abstract. That kind of upset me, because I was really hoping to stick to my original idea.

One of the biggest issues in our group is that we all have a really different vision for the skit. I personally do not have any specific vision, but I am willing to break away from the abstract if that will get us a better grade and make things more clear. I am not sure if all of us are willing to do that. We also get distracted at night by all of our other work and never get to do substantial work on the script. When we do work on it, it does not work well and I am never happy with how it comes out. This shows in our performances, for example when the audience was confused about the role of the Madonna. In my head, she was another member of the family, but to Abby and Nadya, she played more of a spiritual role.

The language in our scripts is not very well done. It does not read well, and it is clear that some is written by me, some by Nadya, and other parts by Abby. We all have unique writing styles. We already started changing that, and will need to finish tonight.

I think we all realize the majority of our issues come from a lack of communication. It is difficult, but we have to find a way around it. I believe our lack of communication also showed through to the audience - things the class asked us, we all had different answers. All of the feedback will allow us to focus on one thing.

    The feedback was very useful, because it gave us a specific direction. We were kind of going nowhere, and now we have an idea of what to do. I picture us making this more about Josephine, and her story, instead of a prequel to the story in the book. We have to re envision the entire plot line. We decided to have the mom leave earlier, and spread out the very beginning to make it much longer. In a sense, it is divided into quarters:

1. Mom and Grandma before the Massacre, ends with Massacre
2. Mom teaching Josephine about Massacre, ends with prayer and visit to river
3. Josephine begins to doubt stories, mom confers with Madonna and visits the baby, ends with mom being taken away
4. Josephine goes back to river, sees Madonna for first time, begins to restore faith.

Now that we have a clear path, we can go back and rearrange. I am not going to lie, I am really worried about how this skit will end up. We are working on it, but I know it will take a lot to get to a good point. I know we can do it!